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[–]Mnemonic 1 insightful - 1 fun1 insightful - 0 fun2 insightful - 1 fun -  (5 children)

Great dark story with the biggest mystery: How was Ignacio kept alive in the USA healthcare system with no one to pay for him? 15 years is a lot even for rich fundamentalist/conservative Christians...

Also the 'act' of him being there for his sister, how much and what kind of impact would that have on the life of his sister going forward? How did his family go through the 17 years of presumably not knowing what happened? What impact would this meeting have on the public when the video leaks/is broadcasted?

For what reason did the reporter (probably) set this meeting up? Just for click-bait, genuine care, or some mixture of both or even more?

Great short-story inspired considerations/overthinking does this story spring. Glad this is the first post.

[–]portcity[S] 2 insightful - 1 fun2 insightful - 0 fun3 insightful - 1 fun -  (4 children)

As it happens, this story was inspired by this horrifying podcast I listened to today (see /p/Podcasts for the recommendation). It's called Room 20 and it's a true story!!! OMG right? And yeah, the state of California has spent $4 million (so far) keeping him alive on life support ... because I guess they're not legally allowed to just kill someone (even though I feel like most compassionate people would argue it would be better to take him off life support?) What a story.

[–]Mnemonic 1 insightful - 1 fun1 insightful - 0 fun2 insightful - 1 fun -  (3 children)

I thought that much because I saw that podcast post too.

But you're kinda (just a little) making your short, as a short, a little less short because this is outside info. A short's hidden, or just often overlooked, power is that it doesn't have much lore because of the format. This gives the readers a lot of imaginative freedom about the the 'world' it is set in:

As an example: I thought up an America that went bankrupt or otherwise collapsed (from the trade war with CHINA) so that Canada took over/absorbed it and the Border Patrol was a group of Arizonians that named themselves that (because in Canada it would be called Border Mounties or something).

[–]portcity[S] 2 insightful - 1 fun2 insightful - 0 fun3 insightful - 1 fun -  (2 children)

that's so good! write that! I love this sub by the way. I also started /p/WritingPrompts which this would be good for

[–]Mnemonic 1 insightful - 1 fun1 insightful - 0 fun2 insightful - 1 fun -  (1 child)

I'm subscribed, though this port is more for 'ramblings' kinda stories and /p/WritingPrompts for comment containing a story related to the prompt. I'm dabbling in the description and all, as you might have seen in the chat of this port.

[–]portcity[S] 2 insightful - 1 fun2 insightful - 0 fun3 insightful - 1 fun -  (0 children)

Yes, I saw. You're doing a great job.